初雪や一二三四五六人
hatsu yuki ya ichi ni san yon go roku hito
David’s English
first snowfall
one, two, three, four
five, six people
by Issa, 1821
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sakuo comment
How to divide second line and third line according to 575 rhythm?
一二三四五六人 (ichi ni san yon go roku hito)
Second line
ichi ni san yon
♪♪ ♪_ ♪♪ ♪♪= 7 syllables + 1 pause
Third line
go roku hito
♪_ ♪♪ ♪♪= 5 syllables +1 pause
The above is my trial. I think this punctuation makes 575 rhythm and lead
us to the atmosphere in which we feel first snow falling.
sakuo haiga.
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